Successful metaphors and similes bring a literary passage to life. But metaphors and similes are not always effective. In a recent GCSE English paper, there was a question that asked for a short story which had to include examples of metaphors and similes. Here is a choice selection of extracts from candidate’s work:
1. She walked into my office like a centipede with 98 missing legs.
2. His thoughts tumbled in his head, making and breaking alliances like underpants in a tumble dryer.
3. Her hair glistened in the rain like nose hair after a sneeze.
4. She caught your eye like one of those pointy hook latches that used to dangle from doors and would fly up whenever you banged the door open again.
5. The little boat gently drifted across the pond exactly the way a bowling ball wouldn’t.
6. McMurphy fell 12 stories, hitting the pavement like a paper bag filled with vegetable soup.
7. Her eyes were like two brown circles with big black dots in the centre.
8. The dandelion swayed in the gentle breeze like an oscillating electric fan set on medium.
9. Her vocabulary was as bad as, kinda’ like, sorta, whatever.
10. He was as tall as a six-foot-three-inch tree.
11. The hailstones leaped from the pavement, just like maggots when you fry them in hot grease.
12. Long separated by cruel fate, the star-crossed lovers raced across the grassy field toward each other like two freight trains, one having left London at 6:36pm travelling at 55mph, the other from York 4:19pm at a speed of 35mph.
13. The politician was gone but unnoticed, like the full stop after the Dr. On a Dr Pepper can.
14. John and Mary had never met. They were like two hummingbirds who had also never met.
15. The thunder was ominous sounding, much like the sound of a thin sheet of metal being shaken backstage during the storm scene in a play.
16. The red brick wall was the colour of a brick-red crayon.
17. Even in his last years, Grandad had a mind like a steel trap, only one that had been left out so long it had been rusted shut.
18. Shots rang out, as shots are meant to do.
19. The plan was simple, like my brother Phil, but unlike Phil, this plan just might work.
20. The young fighter had a hungry look, the kind you get from not eating for a while.
21. He was as lame as a duck. Not the metaphorical lame duck either, but a real duck that was actually lame. Maybe from stepping on a land mine or something.
22. She had a deep, throaty, genuine laugh, like that sound a dog makes just before it throws up.
23. It came down the stairs looking very much like something no one had ever seen before.
24. The ballerina rose gracefully en pointe and extended one slender leg behind her, like a dog at a lamppost.
25. The revelation that his marriage of 30 years had disintegrated because of his wife’s infidelity came as a rude shock, like a surcharge at a formerly surcharge-free cashpoint.
26. It was a working class tradition, like fathers chasing kids around with their power tools.
27. He was deeply in love. When she spoke, he thought he heard bells, as if she were a dustcart reversing.
28. She grew on him like she was a colony of E. coli and he was room temperature British beef.
29. Her voice had that tense, grating quality, like a first-generation thermal fax machine that needed a band tightened.
30. It hurt the way your tongue hurts after you accidentally staple it to the wall.
31. Her face was a perfect oval, like a circle that had its two other sides gently compressed by a Thigh Master.
All of these similes and metaphors “fail” in amusing ways although some include genuinely brilliant observations.
Which is your favourite?
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My favorite is 31
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😂
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My favorite is 14. I feel as though This would have made an excellent Flight of the Conchords song! Hahaha
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Brilliant, a paper bag full of vegetable soup is pretty good I thought but then my sense of humour is a little on the black side.. . Like a funeral during a power cut you might say.
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It’s better than a paper bag full of vomit I suppose! 😂
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What an excellent exercise for students! Enjoyed reading each one. http://www.brilliantviewpoint.com
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Thank you!
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Very educational with up to the mark without any debris.
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Thank you!
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This is so funny! I had to stop reading several times because I was laughing so hard in a public place.
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Glad to have brightened your day! 😁
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These are hilarious!
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I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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This just made my day! xD
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I’m glad you liked it!
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no.7, I just… I just don’t know what to say.
“Her blood boiled like an egg being boiled.” An actual sentence that a boy in my class in yr 11 used after my English teacher spent two lessons lecturing us about this. I will never forget it, hahaha.
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Brilliant!
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“The little boat gently drifted across the pond exactly the way a bowling ball wouldn’t.” That one made me giggle. These are all great. Thanks for sharing!
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I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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Wasn’t expecting to be amused when I clicked open the post . Seriously, centipede with 98 missing legs and grew on him like a colony of E Coli on beef , the lame duck etc , each an absolute gem. Fantastic compilation!
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Thank you!
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Haha 😀
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#3 made me laugh out loud. Such a comparison.
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Glad you enjoyed it!
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#3. I embarrassed myself in an elevator reading that one and laughing out loud. I’m actually wiping away tears now.
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Ha ha 😂. I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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Hilarious. I’ve read some of these in Logic textbook once.
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I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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These are hilarious! I’m going to recommend your blog to my writing group, they will love it.
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Thank you, that’s very kind!
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Haha . These metaphors and similes better to avoid 😂
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Glad you enjoyed it!
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It was fun to read 💞
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Hahaha these are hilarious xD such a fun read!
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I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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Too funny! I particularly liked #12: Long separated by cruel fate, the star-crossed lovers raced across the grassy field toward each other like two freight trains, one having left London at 6:36pm travelling at 55mph, the other from York 4:19pm at a speed of 35mph.
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Yes, I think they got mixed up with the maths exam!
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They’re all so awful they’re amazing! The mental images they conjured up were… horrifyingly awful.
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Very funny though! Glad you enjoyed it!
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Useful in studies
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They are very hilarious
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I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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I’m going to have to share these with my English teacher husband! He’ll get a kick out of them.
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Might come in handy to use with his class!
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Definitely!!! His Jr. High kids would get a laugh out of them!
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